critique my (creepypasta?)

well here i am .. to tell you about my novel JonahxJäger its about a boy who lives into the woods with his mom and stepfather... one day her mom dissapears, he tought it was just a fight between her and his stepfather, one night he goes tto sleep and wakes up on a abandoned factory .. his step father wants to kill him .. he has another mind (a psichotic mind) and have a killing mate .. and the hause burned down .. his mom still dissapeared .. what the hell happened? follow it and discover it!!
did i tell too much? .. not really .. come here and read it!! sissadds.deviantart.com/art/My…